Finally finished. Wasn't helped that my stupid computer started a stupid update when i was almost done, but it's done now, so there's that.
That said, I'm almost 100% certain I hate almost everything about this chapter, and may actually rewrite it or even scrap it altogether. Dunno, will see how i feel after food and sleep.
As for why, well... I'd explain, but that'd probably be another ch length of ranting. Suffice it to say, I feel like Song, Alsantset, and maybe even Dastan come off as ... out of characte...
2018-07-17 00:02:48 +0000 UTC
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Sorry.
BTW, do you guys want me to actually post I'm gonna be late, or you just happy to leave it be and let the chapter come whenever?
2018-07-15 20:19:03 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WbHFZ6Brffs_dutf70E-t-RuYMUJDSd_8LTItp-iM2o/edit?usp=sharing
Time to wake sweet child, the day waits for no one.
Groaning in reply, Yan retreated into the comforting darkness beneath her firm pillow and away from the dazzling light of the morning sun. Merciless as always, Eun yanked the silk covers off Yans body and pinched the back of her thigh, the chi...
2018-07-12 23:40:08 +0000 UTC
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Sorry for late ch, no internets :'(
Here it is tho.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jJcmrEwRuMNYqoYwo2y3-mSbtCVO-ZmIJEMBDTAX-R4/edit?usp=sharing
I find it amusing that despite all her talk of courtesy and customs, Luo-Luo is so starstruck she almost forgets to curtsy for the Legate. She has plenty of book smarts but is completely lacking in real life experience, a cag...
2018-07-11 00:32:46 +0000 UTC
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ending is rushed and badly written, but it gets the point across.
And to think, i was THIS close getting the patreon ch out alongside the regular one... SO close... :'(
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bhkUo3riBVSuZMmyVuwahfmlMml4MbkkNePav_4Kd7U/edit?usp=sharing
The phantasm peeled away and Luo-Luo came to with a shuddering gasp, waking to a world seeped in fea...
2018-07-08 20:30:48 +0000 UTC
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This ch only covered half of what i wanted, so I might extend it if the rest isn't enough for another chapter. We'll see.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iuzt8J5xs5at_coqam2PKqlXES2hnHVsDTB-vaKtAjI/edit?usp=sharing
Oddly enough, this wasnt the worst wedding banquet Ive attended.
My dry wit remains wholly unappreciated as my guests sit in shocked...
2018-07-05 22:57:38 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MB3JMv0n5hgfYO-i3gmXS1cI8lKSOJzsZsie13CGZPU/edit?usp=sharing
As the Bekhai Khishigs marched out to surround the gathered guests, visions of bitter conflict and slaughtered nobles flashed through Yuzhens mind. Reacting a beat too slow, she ran on stage dragging Gerel behind her, hoping to talk some sense into Baatar before her premonitions came to pass....
2018-07-04 16:17:29 +0000 UTC
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sorry. Ate too much meat and having trouble finding my focus. Dbl srry considering it such a big cliff and long time, but such is life.
My bad. I am not a good boy. Sadface.
2018-07-03 19:58:39 +0000 UTC
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Rushed the ending a little, will flesh it out, but POKER CALLS so fuck all yall.
Sorry. I just love gambling so much...
K enjoy.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1l12eBBYhl7oDxERFhqoZvWAXBvN7kZvCbHZozuabXvs/edit?usp=sharing
Patron Keifru, Sam anon
Checking the mirror for the umpteenth time, Luo-Luo straightened her hair piece...
2018-06-30 00:31:47 +0000 UTC
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Ch 346 will come tomorrow probably, but saturday at the latest for sure.
Maybe.
Cuz you know... I might get hit by a bus or sth. Who knows.
2018-06-28 21:21:59 +0000 UTC
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The ending is still up for debate. I might add more or I might leave it as is. dunno, but I'm out of time today, so here it is. Enjoy,.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uonncDUqR9KLE16RQQVXf2UW7N5uGlcVG9mk2pW7qCk/edit?usp=sharing
After ninety minutes of smiling and saluting, the seemingly endless stream of guests finally slows to a trickle, giving me time to ease my tort...
2018-06-26 20:01:00 +0000 UTC
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Hi. I'm back. Check the chapter on RR for pictures and update :D
Also, considering it's the 24th and the month is almost over, I realize it's not fair to you all. If anyone wants a refund for the month, message me and i'll try to make that happen, either through patreon or paypal, whichever easiest. No hard feelings.
Now, chapter. Took me literally all week to write, because I kept starting over in a new PoV. Blergh. Enjoy :D
2018-06-24 19:55:15 +0000 UTC
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more polished and with an ending, but no meme and way too long. dunno wat I'll do about that, but meh.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dJ9mibSv-YY8upWzTr67ym2OjD1ljv1yzZqOtHlmywk/edit
Striding through the carpeted hallway, Zian paid no attention to the palatial furnishings or opulent decor, his thoughts focused on the tribulations ahead. Tonight marked a turning point in his life, eas...
2018-06-13 18:02:54 +0000 UTC
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Didn't round out the conclusion, but time is up. Will finish when err... well, I feel like it, pretty much. So yea. Enjoy
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rJsoodjgcgFQP_Bu1ZqAgNHFmJwFbIrUIobTWdWASr8/edit?usp=sharing
Striding through the carpeted hallway, Zian barely glanced at the palatial furnishings or opulent decor, his attention focused on the tribulations ahead. Tonig...
2018-06-01 19:31:22 +0000 UTC
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Scrapped my original plan, which was for a parade through the city (Rain's idea to save money) to show LuoLuo off while they go visit his parents. Once there, he'd be told he had to throw a banquet anyways, and sadness ensues, but Sarnai smacks him upside the head. Felt it was stupid halfway through writing it and did this instead.
This means 343 will come to patreon tomorrow, or possibly much...much... later, cuz PoE starts are filled with theorycrafting builds. anyways, sorry, here you go, and enjoy.
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2018-05-31 15:40:10 +0000 UTC
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The costs of Rain's retinue needs adjusting, and I'm probably going to cut the whole explanation about numbers out, and just leave LuoLuo's reactions, giving me more room to work with. Gonna go walk do and look at it again, but enjoy for now.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1axK5mQ_wenMVJURHfAVAaB-WfJs40fkFgvR4nzjXjYM/edit?usp=sharing
The more Luo-Luo learned ...
2018-05-29 20:54:26 +0000 UTC
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Author's note: Tentative ending on the ch. It feels like not much happened and I'm not too happy about it, but I wanted to have Mila's thoughts on the whole matter aired out and that took most of the chapter. I hafta do some actual work now, so that's it for today, but I might add more later on.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AACuDd_f4LC4178GQLww7EO-lLWmqLbyxS5ndejRmAs/edit?usp=sharing...
2018-05-28 16:17:07 +0000 UTC
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Sorry, late chapter. will be up tomorrow, like, 16-24 hours from time of this post. i considered posting an unfinished one, but a vote on discord turned that idea down, so if you sad, join discord and never leave so this doesn't happen again.
2018-05-27 20:14:39 +0000 UTC
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So I'm not gonna lie, I didn't really do anything about all your comments. Yea rain seems mean, but like... he thinks Luo-Luo's a spy. He's not gonna be all kind and sweet. I still did some rewriting, because the original ch did not convey the tone i wanted or really get to the points i wanted presented. So, here y'll go. It's different enough, so read it :D
https://docs.google.com/document...
2018-05-25 15:42:03 +0000 UTC
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Not entirely content with this. May make sweeping changes. we'll see.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/17H7uLXwoTz6Oo8djBs7Lv0j6Cd3DIZR7LnfNVZFyLHk/edit?usp=sharing
Luo Luo had much to be aggrieved about.
During her graduation ceremony, shed drawn the eye of every Noble, Royal, Imperial in the room as she was presented on stage. Theyd seen her poetry compositions, calligr...
2018-05-24 20:34:59 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/15ser32KqiB2HItJOnj46ORuwGxbrDEIeL6nkliG66ms/edit?usp=sharing
In the last twenty-four hours, Ive been forced to accept a lot of hard truths about myself.
For example, I now know that I am bat-shit crazy and have been talking to myself as a coping mechanism for almost three years now. On the flip side, I also learned that I am incredibly adept at co...
2018-05-22 20:24:03 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ygj2Y6BPCKeDkvV7E1wFZMAKIKMMeT2EETgJmasRk7c/edit?usp=sharing
Hands trembling and jaw clenched, Luo-Luo smoothed her dress and patted her hair in an effort to calm herself as she waited for permission to disembark. The Mother was truly unfair to Her children, but Luo-Luo was determined to endure. Clutching her handkerchief, she faked a demure smile and lamen...
2018-05-18 18:14:21 +0000 UTC
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Sorry, my brain already in vacation mode, plus the chapter harder to write than expected and I have a dinner thing to get to. Maybe I'll finish by tonight, but tomorrow for sure.
2018-05-17 21:40:24 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SEkoHy6iSVUPvDvyBLbC3ljg4Ghrjvecvxk2ASyoUI4/edit?usp=sharing
I finally did it.
Gazing out over the crowd, I soak in the applause and adulation I so desperately desired for so many years. Ive made it big now. After seven long years, with no cheat, the roughest of starts, and almost dying who knows how many times, here I am standing at the forefront of my peers,...
2018-05-15 23:04:46 +0000 UTC
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1z1aiJjn_tvvPQvrefZBw6-4WNeJsdQO-fz5UA_OAr1I/edit?usp=sharing
Might change the ending. Dunno.
Du Min Yan felt neither fear nor anxiety as she stood before the largest audience the Empire had ever seen. This was her moment in the sun, with millions of people watching as she stood across from her formidable opponent, Wu Gam. His match against Y...
2018-05-13 21:03:51 +0000 UTC
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The ending is a little lacklustre atm, mostly because my original plan is gonna be way too long. I'll write the rest of it and see if i can find a nicer place to end, (or nicer way), and we'll do that.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rr3NomyEV1PqaBAiGIkBjdWpVt6wLck1E0pSatJAUXg/edit?usp=sharing
Mind reeling from Dastans utterly domineering performance, Im left with one single que...
2018-05-10 21:18:48 +0000 UTC
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Sorry had to do it. Alrighty, enjoy!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1A2OYkvcwWp7IqqO5aquO9RIn-ZQs6BKgu8JdgO1WTcI/edit?usp=sharing
Chest swelling with pride, Dastan stood tall at the bosss side, thoroughly enjoying the looks of confusion and consternation from the other retinues. Every time he heard someone call Falling Rain the Undying Savage, Dastans...
2018-05-08 20:09:37 +0000 UTC
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Because I released a double chapter on RR, so check that out. Will have another chapter here on tues (which won't be on RR until thursday), then advanced chapter back on thursday.
2018-05-06 20:01:51 +0000 UTC
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Basking in the spotlight, I ride onto the docks with head held high and chest out, playing my role of Number One Talent in the North to perfection. I thought Id be nervous with all the attention, but on the contrary, I feel invigorated and excited knowing millions of eyes are watching me as I ride up to meet the Legate. Its just one of many changes Ive noted since my revelation, a part of my personality I siphoned off to my second self. This new me is going to take a lot of getting used to, but since time is at a premium, Im divi...
2018-05-04 20:00:56 +0000 UTC
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This one's a doozy. I literally wrote like 5k words, but cut out 800 for ch 333. I might take more from this ch and move it to 333, because holy shit 4200 words is too much.
And that's pre edit. Usually it gets longer when I add in flavour and stuff.
k. it's 9:20 pm and i need to eat dinner now, so bye!
Edit: 9:55pm and i just got home. The second I stepped away from this ch, i realized i need to rewrite it. First as Rain's PoV and the gifts, then Dastan's PoV for the fights. As it stands, I...
2018-05-04 01:19:54 +0000 UTC
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